POETRY

Free Yet Succumbs – If I Were You!

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If I were you
If I was free
Free from materialistic pain
Free of ungodly problems
Problems of unsought love
Problems of a redundant life
Life hurts
Life is demanding
Demanding narcissistic relations
Demanding ego-maniacal you
You so selfish
You so cold hearted
Cold hearted grievous affair
Cold hearted counterfeit alliance
Alliance is unreal 
Alliance is fake
Fake is everything
Fake is your fond touch
Touch me not
Touch not my soul
Soul breaks
Soul craves
Craves for some relevance
Craves for some substance
Substance lacks
Substance misses
Misses the way of life
Misses the spark
Spark weakens
Spark is eventually dead
Dead fancies
Dead is my self-assurance 
Self-assurance cries for help
Self-assurance no one cares to unchain
Unchain my desires
Unchain my dreams
Dreams crash
Dreams fizzle
Fizzle and burn
Fizzle and reduce to ashes
Ashes are meaningless
Ashes are lost
Lost in this world
Lost of any hope
Hope slowly diminishes
Hope eventually succumbs
Succumbs to your comatose assumption
Succumbs to your mindless judgement
Assumption..
Judgement..

This post is written in response to OctPoWriMo Challenge – where you’ll write a “POEM” everyday for 31 days, using the prompt word. Follow this link to learn more about it, see other submissions, and to share your own. Come and join in the fun folks!

Day 13 word prompt is “IF I WERE YOU!”

Suggested Form – Blitz Poem.

The Blitz Poem is an invented verse form found on-line at Shadow Poetry, it was created by Robert Keim. One of my absolute favorite forms!

As always any feedback and advise is more than appreciated!

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  4. She’s Back, en force as well. 💕 This was definitely a dark subject. 😬 But you handled it with such imagery and emotion. 😳Hope this isn’t a familiar subject. 😕 Just impressive. 😘☺️😲

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  11. This is a class apart and so deep and introspective. I believe challenges like these help you evolve as a poet and writer. Would love to be a part someday.

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  21. Absolute delight to read this. Though its is an oxymoron to say this for a poem which captures a bit dark subject but I like the way your handled the blitz. Well done, Richa.

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  30. Totally understand the essence and crux of it ….This is deep …✨And I hope so you are finally Richa ..Coz you are writing this with a deeper understanding

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    1. Thank you so much sweetheart, I am absolutely fine!❤️
      We’ve all been hurt in different ways and this is just the jist of heartache we all go through in our lives.

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  31. You mastered this style of poetry beautifully in this intense and heartfelt poem Richa!❤️

    This is a poetry form I have yet to try.😉 I haven’t challenged myself to a set style in a little while, I definitely should play with it for fun!😘❤️

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